Whoa excellent poem! I loved both versions of it, keep it up and take care! Also, thank you for the comment. It meant a lot to me. Keep it up and take care! =)

~Grace

whoa... there's something about that poem. something so nice and magical that i can't summarize in one word... it's peaceful but so hypnotic... well, i loved it. keep writing. take care:)

nice flow feelings expressed very well