Wow..a shoutinh poem, Veeery interesting Mr Bond.

This is simple and heartfelt and i appreciate that. I think it could use a little metaphor and some mystery to it...y'know make people think about what your words could mean.

I'm only suggesting this as an idea, and not something you need to do in order to be better.

thank you for the suggestion...u seem very intelligent to be honest

well if you've ever been 16 u would know...at least ppl actually like mine

Ahhhh and justplainme the big tossers poems are any better - i think and know not!

Damn straight to hun you have alot more positive feedback and ratings than any of his poetry - it only gets hate fed attention - dont worry babygirl your extremely talented and i think you being that way at a tender 16 simply makes him jealous - i mean when your 25 his age - your writing calibre and standard is obviously gunna be much higher than his!

Loved this poem girl!

Stay smiling MWAH Eirisa

thank ya tons darling...