Love the way you target your audience attention to the first person only to make them know at the end it is one and same person from the start. Simple but beautiful. It is alright by me, a sure way to express ones self.
Keep writing sweetie!!

are you kidding me, why do you need help? i love this one! thats really good. if i were you i wouldnt change a thing!

I agree, I really enjoyed this poem, the only thing, I can say is that it didn't flow as nicely as most of yours... Still an excellent poem... Good Job

No need for help here...awesome poem.

Traci...thanx for your comment, our poems are sort of similiar but i have written mine solely from my mind. ure poem is good i dont really think you need help with it...its good...5/5!:)