oo, i like tht poem, its pretty, and btw thnx for commenting on my poem, i actually just added a new its called "Painted" read if you want

keep writing

XOXO
Christina

thanks for the comment and I'll give you an honest critique if you want it...

Well I absolutely love the first stanza and it's a poem many can relate to, however, your rhyme scheme doesn't follow through well (which I did the same thing when I first started writing lol) To make your poems more enjoyable try a constant rhyme scheme such as ABAB, ABCB, ABCC, etc, you get me? lol otherwise, your writing is great especcially for beginners! keep writing, I see potential in you-5

love Heather.

damn. you got flows, ma. keep it up. 5/5

I love this poem. nice work!

Hi! I really enjoyed reading your poetry. Your words create such strong emotions, but I felt they could become even more powerful with visuals.

I’m a freelance artist with 3 years of experience, and I can turn the feelings and imagery in your poems into illustrations so readers can actually see the words come to life. We could even start with one poem or a few stanzas as a small project.

I’d also love to share a few ideas on how visuals could help you reach a wider audience and create another way to benefit from your poetry.

If you’re interested, feel free to reach me here:

llunarlibrary@gmail.com
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Warm Regards,
LunarLibrary