Overall it is good. You used a variety of words and I like that. You werent repetetive and you kept the rythem. Great job

Keep your head up high!
Baby ~ B
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the poems i have read by you are excellent! keep writing!!

Pervasively emotional in a deadened manner... once again excellent.

But as to life... keep going regardless.

greatness!