WOW that is like so good! I mean it ur so good at this!!!

this is freakin awsum ....i love it . keep up the great work. one of your best.
xoxo sherrie

Hey that was great, i could feel the tention build up as i read on.
You have a very creative way of drawing your reader in. Its like your painting a picture.

that's a cool poem i like it. great job

hey its pretty good i just didnt get alot of emotion but its all good maybe just your style i guess peace out yo keep writing