aawww that was sweet.. i love it!

that's cool poem good job

thank you for your comments and votes.. Take Care

Nice way of giving a visual for your poem. You'd probably be an outstanding Journalist. I liked the way you ended this poem. You know what your doing..

-BJ

nicely written

defently well written , one of my faves by you (i've only read 3-5 but still) wonderful!! God Bless

Love Heather

gReat! 5/5

Wow your above comments kind of, suck, sorry to say it's just that they don't seem to tell me what they really thought of the poem and that just annoys me but anyway:
What I think this is, I could be wrong, that the bottom of your poem is about someone telling a girl taht he likes her and perhaps he gets rejected and tries to commit suicide. Maybe even dies and watches what is happening to him.
I really like the () and the [] to lable actions and daydreams. It keeps things from being mixed up and makes those parts stand out.

Wow this is really sad!! such a beautiful poem!! I loved it so much. It was very descriptive.. and i could picture everything in my mind. Great job! 5/5***