very touching poem...keep writing...i love them...take care and keep smiling...FIVE>>>

awww if only ppl we love could see what they do, oh well keep them coming!

abby xxxx

Yes!!! I can hear, feel, see it all! You've painted a very good picture with your words.

In the last line, I might consider changing "slowing" to "only" or "always"

Thanx for all the comments they all mean so much to me....

aww! really good poem- keep up tha work! you are truly gifted! if you could get tha chance try and read some of mine~! thanx!
much <3, pocket~

No way, its not kinda gay. at all!!! i love it. its so sad and i know how you feel. this is amazing work : ) keep your head up!!