aww thats sad but gud **5** i dont think dads now wot they put us thro leaving. luv lidxxXxx

I love it

So sad...so very sad.

i know how you feel and how much it hurts, keep your head up x

thats really good..almost seems unfinished...keep ur chin up! :) xx

it's very good; full of emotion, i feel what you're saying. excellent job. ;-)

=] awsome as... i like this poem

wow another great poem! really liked the lines.....a second that was captured
a moment for me to see.......really sweet and touching poem!
xxxLoUxxx

OMG that was amazing i can really relate to it keep it up hun u got talent!
lilkit

very good

hmm..this one is very original too. I liked it. But maybe work on the flow on this one too, because the middle stanzas flow is a bit off. That's okay though, over all i didn't see any faults in this poem and I really enjoyed it. The idea behind it is great!
SatuzKa

That was a touching poem! It would have been much easier to read if there had been no use of "netspeak". If you go back and replace such things as "u" with you, and capitillize the "I's", I feel that the emotions that you are conveying will come across more clearly. I'm really sorry about your dad. Keep writing!

This is about your Dad right...and I'm guessing he left? Same happened to me when I was 11...it was a real hard thing to go through for me. It's a real heartfelt poem though...it's just a shame that things aren't always how you wish they'd be huh?!