I love your peice, it's amazing, how do you write like that! wow that is all i can say, nice work I would love to see more!

Very good poem! =]

Thank you for your honest comment, I didn't mind it at all. I'm actually not finished with that poem yet. Those lines just came to me, and I wanted to write them down before I forgot them (since I tend to do that, lol). Anyway, thanks again!

Take care!

I thought it was great. Although a little rough around the edges that's what makes it so good. I thought that it meant like he had a love in his hands and she was everything he wanted. And then she left. And all he has left is a picture or sculpture. I loved it!! Please read some of my work and tell me what you think.

Hey thanks fo the criticism I could use it. And I know the end was a little odd. I tried to revise, see what you think now. And if you would like a little more unique poems to read of mine, you should read: Those Above, Picture Frames, Murdering Kind, My Curse, Feelings, If There’s A God and My Cave. Check these out if you could, I’d appreciate it.

i olved ur poem soooo much!! iz sooo gr8. plz. keep on writing...

That's a neat piece of work - and this is my honest feedback - maybe u can work on elaborating the middle of the poem a little more. so the drama is built in and takes the reader deepr into the sculptor's mind.

just my honest opinion - and please could u read some of mine too?

sincerely,
shobhana kumar

Amazing piece... I could feel the sculpters tryst.. I felt as though it was about a man who loved the work he did on his angel.. but eventually he had to let go of it.. and it left him broken hearted and one day he would get his angel back.. maybe he would sculpt another piece.. Anyway amazing poem

I like this poem....embrace should not be plural...(Scarred hands embrace [not embraces] her face). The poetic movement and flow of this poem is very natural - it compliments the poem's words.

Sensuous and sensual, and devestatingly melancholic. I'm not sure that I would want the talent to craft such likeliness of one I had lost. Regardless, there is a well-scultped (no pun intended) emotion present in every line. Another wonderful poem.

As I've said.....But I like this one better than the other one:)

Just typing out loud here...

Is he sculpting his headstone or grave memorial?

This poem really made made me think of what inspired you to write it in the first place... really enigmatic work!

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Bert

Actually, it is about a sculptor who lost the one he loved, and is now carving a stone angel in honor of HER... he is not carving himself.

I think FTS Miles got the closest... but thanks everyone for your comments .. :)

Egg roll-
Good job.... it could flow a little smoother in some places... over all GREAT and i can't wait to read the rest of your poems...
Sour straws :)

Beautifull and entirely original.
You've captured the indulging passion of a master at 'is best.