Omg, its a poem of weirdness...interesting stuff. In my opinion, twang twang got repetitive, but im sure it had a point...right? =P

it is continued from the line above it

I feel a bit stupid having to admit this, but I haven't got a clue what that poem was about :S
Despite this, I did like the line
'You can be lonely when you're not alone.' Kind of inspirational.
All in all, a pretty confusing poem but I like the fact that it sounded more like a song. Well done.
Take care of yourself.
All my love,
Laura.
P.S ..My poems are written to express how I feel, not to impress people :) Very grateful for your honesty though. Thankyou.

gr8 poem!!! WOW! and thanx for the comment! ill tryt o fix that!

LoL, i liked how IA picked the only line from you're poem that was played out and made it her favorite. And you're poem... i think they would make awesome lyrics yeah? And in place of "Twang Twang" you can strum something on the guitar!! I like it :-)

Aken Sol

ummmm... what does twang mean???

its a sound

Not my favorite.
don't take my comment too personally, because all together i am hardly fond of love poems, but this one seemed cliche and very much overused. there were a few lovely lines such as,
"My song, unto me, you serenade
under the willow's vast, overbearing shade."
and i admired your techinique of the repetition of "twang twang" I could see what you were attemping to do
However, your usual style and use of powerful text wasn't there. If I just saw this on a random page I never would have thought you wrote it, (you have more talent than this)
so..not my favorite. But keep at it, I look forward to your next piece.

hi thanks for the honest comment on my poetry it helped me alot by the way i liked this poem