that is exceptional, short but amazing! i like how you tied in the time, the world, the pain, and the people around you!
VERY GOOD! 5/5
keep writing!
kt

thats awesome, i love your stuff.

um.... actually guys, ashandflame knew me in 2nd grade and wuz kinda my "#1 fan" then, but theres enuff me 2 go around and im sure that no1 really cares anymore. so i hope alls good.

*update* i knew poo on a stick wen i wuz a baby, i didnt knnow that until know tho... but anywho this whole thing is ridiculus!