Comments : Cowering In The Corner

  • 16 years ago

    by Janie

    that could make a grown man cry!!!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Rebekah

    This is a great poem! I love it!

  • 16 years ago

    by J Avery Johnson

    "I Fell Asleep"

  • 16 years ago

    by bluehun

    loved it,your good,but i dont think you know how good gal

  • 16 years ago

    by Ashmore

    I can relate to an extent. You did well on this poem, and I applaud you. Great Job!

    Take Care, Jess x

  • 16 years ago

    by paddy

    wow i love your poetry it always comes from the hearti agree with bluehun you don't know how fantastly brilliant you are at writing if i had inch of your talent i'dshout it from the roof tops
    now hun down to work
    why you never on msn messanger no more i have daily inernet excess so no excuses lol
    best go hun oh i wrote a poem for you title hyley williams i hope you like
    take care and mail me
    love you loads

  • 16 years ago

    by paddy

    hayley williams* sorry missed a out lol
    love me

  • 16 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    wow thats amazing.. very sad though.. take care Hayley.. I love your writing so keep up the good work.

  • 16 years ago

    by Ducky Ramone

    wow hayley that was really good and it true? if it is i am so sry...and im always there if u want to emails are or msn messenger is also the msn one...ttyl love Kori

  • 15 years ago

    by Stumbling Shaman

    As Janie said, enough to make a grown man cry. That was a difficult poem to read yet I could not turn away. The pain that's laden in every word reaches something deep inside, compells you to keep reading even though it causes such heartache. Hayley, you are a true artist.

  • 15 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    Hayley: So sad, but yet so true. There seems to be no escape from that damage of abuse. I have always loved your writings and pray that someday you will find a sense of security.

    Though this poem is excellent there is just one minor part that I would change

    "Tears stream down her face
    He had did it yet again
    Memories haunt her mind
    Pain takes over her brain"

    The second line I would change to : He did it yet again.

    Just omit the word had and it gives the whole stanza a better flow.

    Again my frien another great work of art you have produced.

    Take care babe


  • 15 years ago

    by cristin handwerk

    This is cristin and this poem has made me an emotional reck unfortunately, but it was an excellent poem!!!!!!!!
    keep thriving for what you beleive in and what you think is right
    hang in there your worth it and you seem like an amazing girl
    love always

  • 15 years ago

    by Danielle

    Wow Hayley... It's yet another emotional one... I know what this girl goes through, so everything you write just touches me... It's amazing. Your a good writer Hayley... Keep it up...!!

  • 15 years ago

    by MutedHummingbird

    Wow , your poem is really good, excellent infact. The poem has a big impact on all that reads it including me although quite upsetting. You are an amazing poet :). Good work xx

  • 15 years ago

    by Lisa

    Wow Hayle its been so a long time since I have read your poems...i've been away for quite some time lol.....Lisa Reed also known as lol. I think you definetly have not lost your touch for've definetly gotten better.......excellent poem.

    Take care, Lis

  • 14 years ago

    by Christie

    Wow. such a sad, poignant poem. congrats, a lot of emotion here. I hope this isn't true. =( my favourite stanza:

    "The scars will never fade away
    The damage is just too deep
    I am too afraid to stay awake
    But much to scared to sleep "

    ^^ GREAT flow, touching words, and leaves me thinking.

    Great job, 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by sarah

    Wow! this is reli gdd!! very touching and emotional!