please comment,
i wrote this one a while ago and i would like to know what you think. I know it's not that good...

hey you thanks for the comment it is one of the best ones that i think that i wrote. i am good and i hope that you are doing the smae. i got a new email it is bobbyb07_5@hotmail.com. i am sorry if i forgot to give it to ya. i really like this poem like i always say every piece that you wirte i can easily relate to in some way . it was a good poem you always write very well. i hope i can read more.
take care mols
much love
-bobby-

You had me at hello

Johnny I LOVE YA!

Wow Molly thanks for your comment and putting me onto your great poems! This one was all to familiar for me and alot of other women out there - you communicated a great point with excellent poetry talent and choice of words! Well Done!

thanks, i appritiate it! I'll keep reading yours i hope you keep reading mine too!
-Molly

thanks, i appretiate it a lot! I'm sorry about your friends, if you ever wanna talk im here!
-Molly

Good poem. enjoyed reading it.

Great poem it flowed really well, the rhyming was excellent, i think this was my favorite part

He can get you to stay,
"just one more night."
He scares you so much,
yet takes away all fright.
He could hurt you so bad,
but you'll make up an excuse
anything to cover up
for the pain and abuse.

and i dont know why people put up with crap like that, the whole world sees it but to the person involved theyre blind, for some reason they see something good in what everyone sees as so bad

Open up your eyes,
please... why can't you see?
Everything he has to give
causes pain and misery.
Open up your eyes,
don't let him have his way.

Very strong lines with rhetorical questions that really engaged me to think aloud. Great art of work, well penned and well written.

5/5 all the way

With love
Fsams

No visualization with this. but still great.

"anything to cover up
for the pain and abuse."

i think should just be
"anything to cover up
the pain and the abuse."

just my thoughts. this poem is about so many relationships girls have with guys. and it is so sad that they have to go through it. hopefully one of them will read it and realize they need to get out.
5/5