That was really something. Thas was truly great you really hit the spot. great work!!!=)

Woah, amazing poem hun. It really is. I don't really see anything wrong with this at all. The phrasing is perfect. Thinking about it afterwards, kind of brings tears to your eyes. I'm not sure whether this is how you're feeling now or how you have felt, either way, you've portrayed it amazingly.
Flawless.
Take care of yourself.
All my love,
Laura.

wow, amazing poem. well done

wow anoter great poem.

How many times have I held on to your hand,
And my heart's started beating without my command.

i liked that part. u have talent inabundance and i look forward to reading more of ur poems.

take care.

So pretty. :)