Hey like how you put that poem, great job thought that u expressed emotions ,
Laura101

not bad, keep up the good work, and keep on writin' ,i'd like it if you'd check out some of my poems too, im new at this and i'd like the comments and some advice =), thanks

very good poem, my friends say i have had a rough life and this poem kinda discribes it.very good poems on everything.Keep it up!!

NICE...N TRUE.....KEEP IT DAT WAI...
-XOXO
*LaDiiE*EaZiiE*

I like what you are saying here, though the repeat of 'forever more' in the last stanza makes the flow a bit awkward as does the 's' on the first holes in the second stanza(just my opinion).But the emotion/sentiment you convey is spot on-I, and many, can definitely relate.The brevity fits it perfectly, says just enough, and so much.Nice job.

I like this one it kind of relates to many people 5/5

Wow, yh i have felt like that. i got through it though with the help of god. great poem keep it up
5/5 check out my poems.

I know I have!

Nice poem 5/5 i really liked the last two lines

"The lights Fading and the darkness grows forever more
until no one can see you forever more."

xD
~NinjaGirl~