Your poem is very good. In the future though, I would write the lines of your poems on that--lines rather in one big paragraph. Hard to read. Other than that, look forward to seeing your poetry.

Interesting commentary on the system.

Like the girls said, it could use a bit of form to define it more, but the message is clear and well thought out.

Bert

Without a doubt this is very good,

And who needs "line structure" when your writing is from the heart. Poetry has no rules nor guidelines. Well done again.

--;;Kalah

yeah, this is a very good poem. good job chris!! 5.0

gj luved it 5/5

Wow... my jaw dropped when I read your poem. You have definitely proved that guys can write awesome poems. I think it is a excellently written poem. Don't let the past stop you from writing! I think its really cool that you are from michigan because my mom is from michigan and I love michigan! I also love your name!!! Okay so please read my poems and comment, I will most definitely keep reading yours!

awesome and well written, 5

I really like your poems, they are really great and they relate me particularly

i do agree with most people that you should consider the lines and not just a big paragraph! but anyways that was an awsome poem and i could tell that it was coming from your heart! way to GO!! keep them coming

im gonna cry......definitely a 5

wow i feel for u i love ur poem i can really tell there come from the heart hey if u ever want to talk i am here,i enjoy reading ur poems there so ture please read my poems