i like it!!

Not a fan of cutty poems but this one fills all the criteria. Good job.

Je sais, je sais. I have condescended to cutting poem level. Anyway check out, "Contention," its more your style, plus you will actually understand it, versus other people... who... you know... wont.

Loves, K

I really don't know what to say... I think it's a good poem, it's not too intriguing though. I have written cutting poems too- though I don't do it, and I am ashamed of writing of a topic so oftenly used.
But that's not my thoughts on this poem; your work is different enough to be creative, even if the theme has been used many times.
So, well done, and I am sorry if I have made little sense with my comments.
:-) keep writing.