Comments : When Deafening

  • 19 years ago

    by Kevin

    This is about having a full on emotional talk with someone you care about deeply...and being scared to say what you really feel for fear or hurting the other person....and how evertually that fear pushes the interaction down the same weak asses path as every other one.

  • 19 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    Kevin,

    This is really good. I cannot say how often I have been on this path myself. It seems as though you were talking directly to me and expressing my feelings when you stated

    "I sit numb and just staring
    oblivious
    to points of hammer"

    It seems as though everyone has been in this psoition at one point or time in their life..

    Take Care
    And keep writing

    --Sher

  • 19 years ago

    by Shædow Poet

    Well, the theme of this poem is still a little curious to me, I might go back and read it again...
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    Great metaphors, truly, this poem shows those who beleive that love poems WILL be repetative, that one CAN write a difference and highly unique piece of art.
    Well done!

  • 19 years ago

    by Shædow Poet

    After reading the comment you wrote about WHAT this is about, I now get it... lol, maybe I should've read your comments first ;)

  • 19 years ago

    by FTS Miles

    Last night I was at a performance of Laurie Anderson, the performance artist (not sure if you're familiar with her, but she's fantastic IMHO).

    She commented that you never stammer at the end of a word because by then it's too late; the fear is at the beginning, but after the start, you're committed. Your poem just made me think of that....

  • 19 years ago

    by Emma

    I like the way that this has been written and it shows that you do not always need to write a long poem to get the meaning across. Great job! Love Emma xxx

  • 19 years ago

    by Tessa

    It is short and quite sweet. Your fluency is well done and different than the rythym you find in most poems. Crisp and Fresh ^_^ I do plan on reading more of your work.

  • 19 years ago

    by D..

    This is great Kevin i love...precious tongues well past silver... 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by cant sleep

    this was a beautiful poem, i loved it. sorry about the stupid people post topic in the forum, i didnt know people would get so off topic. :D well, i loved this poem. keep writing!! i could never compare to this. i wish i could. adios! nancy

  • 17 years ago

    by sweetlips

    Doze r sum deep poetick wordz yuz got thar

  • 16 years ago

    by swill

    You know you write cryptic and intellectual, while cryptic is nice, but in my view I find love poems to be better if they show some love, this was too "steely" for me.

  • 16 years ago

    by MusoXDanielle

    Very good poem! love it
    Please keep writing :-)
    I enjoy your poetry

    Danielle
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