ahh it doesnt rhyme but I still love it completly...it contains amazing words ... I give it a 4/5...God bless and keep on writing!

with love,
Heather

Grim but intense.

That was definetly mysterious and freaky. Enjoyable read. (btw I've got part two in Metaphorical Murder posted since you said you wanted me to let you know...). Good job on the poem.

greeat poem

You are very descriptive with your words, it's almost like a mini story, I really enjoyed it , do keep it up ^_^ I'll definately be reading more.

Great poem =) 5/5! Please Check out my poem "The Silver Moon Sparkling" And "Misery" it would mean a lot.. Take Care/ha det bra

Liked this too. I like your usage of words. I felt a bit numbed after reading it. Sort of chilled.