I thought the entrance was very beautiful,

"Surrounded by an aching sorrow
Guarding just the serenity of a hollow"

and the entire poem spoke of pure emotion.

Although I do think that you lost focus in the poem when you started to force the rhyming in "love.. dove".. "see.. me" But overall, you did a lovely job - hope to see more from you.

u sound happy. enjoy it and be happy. good poem

good stuff!! ur a passionate writer:)

you show so much emotion through your words!!! you're obviously in love!!! take care xxxxxxx

This is an amazing poem and has been written really well. I love the rhyming scheme and it flows really well. Keep writing. 5/5. Love Emma xxx

Thanks for checking out my poems =)
It really meant a lot to me... I like this poem a lot! 5 stars for this one..
keep up the good work... Take Care

That's really sweet. It sounds like you really love her.

beautiful poem, great work...Love it very much!
Love Julie
XOXOX

this is really really beautiful! this adina is very very lucky! great job! keep it up! 5/5

plz comment on mine too!