Wow that was great. Loved the vocabulary and the flow. Also liked the title. Great job on this one.

Great peom one of the best i have read yet *5*

Havn't read a love poem in quite some time. After reading yours, i wonder why i stopped. The form you used was short and sweet. The rhythmn was consistent and the choice of words are beautifully. Good job, i'll be checking more of your works soon.

Aken Sol

great poem, i like it!

I enjoyed this greatly. There is a sensuality on the verge of passion presented in the poem; the event described feels on the precipice edge of collapse into something unadulteratedly erotic but holds that line well. Wonderful poise in your writing.

The only word I questioned was 'physique'. I know that it's integral to both rhyme and meaning but there's something perhaps a bit too intellectual, even clinical about the word 'physique' itself and it gave me pause from the sensuality of the images.

Even that said, it's a wonderful poem.

You do have a point about "physique," I will have to examine that closer and see if another word will fit better.

It does kind of throw off the flow a bit, but at the same time, "body," is so over used... I wish there were another word apart from the two.

I REALLY LIKED THIS POEM ALSO, I GIVE YOU 5/5... GOOD JOB.

COULD YOU VOTE OR COMMENT ON SOME OF MY POEMS IT WOULD REALLY MEAN A LOT TO ME...
MUCH LOVE
~*~HEATHER~*~

Oh very lovely... very strong. I love the rain and kiss description; a very powerful use. This poem is filled with very strong lust; not love, but lust.
You defientely appear to be a talented poet. And this may seen rude and selfish, but if you ever have the time I would be honoured if you checked out a poem by me. You do not have to; I personally hate requests that others give to read their poetry. I just would be honoured.

Back onto the poem- it was a brilliant write. A very nice, strong rhyming, you've made it so it is not forced at all- that's rare in rhymes.
Well done!

Excellent kristina.

5/5. Take Care, Always Believe in Love.

Wishing you a Happy Holi
(the festival of colors, celebrated in India)

Love, Amit

wow i absolutley love that! your great with words keep writing!

Beautiful, tender, and romantic. Lovely poem!

I really liked this poem! It is so well written...enticing! The flow and rythm is flawless and your wonderful descriptions really painted the scene beautifully! Loved this stanza:

"See the moon
Peak past the clouds
Highlighting beauties, hidden in shrouds."

Well done~Holly