This poem was so sweet i just loved it, made me laugh and think thank you for allowing me to read it.......

That poem was so cute...

Just my opinion but in the second line when u said that u wanted her "there" wouldn't u want her "here" with u? it was a cute poem regardless

really liked this one. A good use of words!

ok Danielle i meant There as in "there" to help as a helping friend caring person etc.

plus it's the past tense

well, here or there, either was fine until you said it was past tense... then, of course "there" is correct, but then you need to change other words.... "I wish you had been there when I needed you" that makes it past tense.

You really have a lot of talent, this was a great poem with a lot of good thoughts... you just need to work on your grammar, and that will come with time...