Ww, this poem is fantastic. So well written. It's definitely one of the best I have read on this site. Keep it up.

Love,
Tiff

i love it! amazing write!

I LOVE this.

I loved that you branched to a different style and yet managed to intertwine beuty and flow with it.
I really liked how you portrayed the pain masked by the false smiles and lifestyle,
"Plastic grins and glassy eyes stare at these open wounded veins"
and how the onlookers seemed blind to the inner pain and violence.

I also admired these lines,
"
Screaming insignificance among ears that continue to tune me out
Painting words with a closed up voice, the holes filled up with grout"
And the placement the narrator feels to be drowned out and only heard when the words are significent to the listeners

I LOVED these lines,
"On my knees in religious form, I close my eyes but refuse to pray
My vision of God fled the scene the night my hope broke away"
i also liked how you included other lines describing the uselessness of faith and how it has disolved.

I also loved these lines,
"Stressful threads of pale white skin accumulate into aged floors
Carelessly left in peaceful shreds, and so cautiously ignored
Tempted fingers agonize and beg for the remorse of giving in
Mercy implores to declining faith to appease a wrongful sin"

I would go on but I fear that I will quote the whole piece! overall it was beautiful, BEAUTIFUL and an excellent, excellent read.

FANTASTIC job

wow that was great one of the best yet keep it up girl!!!