wow...thats beautiful!!!! love the way you wrote it. i expecially love when you said
"Bruises may show, scars may stick
But my pain cannot be seen
My stripped eyes behold a future
Whose path is bitterly obscene"
you're incredibly talented. keep up the great work!
-xXx-

I love the first stanza up to the last, nice work -5

Love
Heather

Very good poem about love as well, thankyou for the comments on mine as it too relate to lost love from a divorce after thirty years and my not wanting to love someone again for fear of pain. And yes you hit it on the head

Lovely.
In these lines,
"You may throw your sticks and stones
And they may break me apart
But the words you say in brutal anger
Strike my broken heart"

I like how you took the common phrase then reworded it to show no shield to "sticks and stones" but a wound and growing pain which exceeds fromt them.

in these lines,
"I may stumble, I may even fall
And life will take it's toll
Heaven may crumble, Hell may call
But I refuse to sell my soul"

I loved how you fit in the meaning of never giving up in such a lovely and powerful way.

these,
"Bruises may show, scars may stick
But my pain cannot be seen
My stripped eyes behold a future
Whose path is bitterly obscene"

I loved how you portrayed the utter despair and foreshadow of a deadly 'yet to come'

Well done

This is a very good poem i really liked it. 5/5

Wonderful write, hun. Although I thought everything was written very creatively, I especially liked the way your wrote this:

"The corners of my mouth may turn down
And scar the dimples on my face"

Stay strong.