i would personally leave that last verse out.
but on the whole it was a good poem.
loves confusing it confuses every1 at one time if not most fo the time.

Sad, but well-written. Keep up the good work.
-Kate

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Your a good poet. You have your own unique style of writing. keep on writing and never lose hope. good job.

I would say take out the last verse. It takes away from the poem. I like how it ends with you being confused. Very Nice.