Great poem, very well done.
5/5. Take Care, Always Believe in Love, Amit

Really great poem, you use your words in such a beautiful way, keep it up!
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I love the rythem of this poem! 5/5, and keep up the good work!

I really like the way you've used repettition in this piece, but I have one point that may lead to an improvement. Taking note of the rhyming at the end of the lines, lines 9 and 10 uses 'chance' at the end of both. Personally, I think this lowers the quality of the poem. If one of the 'chances' was changed, then I think it would make it more effective. Apart from that...great poem! Keep it up! Take care Sarah-Lou x x x

it really flowed

Soooo lovely and beautiful. Again so amazing i would only change this part

"But her feet, her feet were agile"
to
But she was quick, her feet were agile"
or something like that feet twice is a little akward.
5/5

Intruiging rhyme scheme, never witnessed one quite like it. Solid content and rhythm, very minor flow issues....well done.