thought the last four stanza's were really good
keep writing
*SuicideQueen*

hey i reli like this 1 u reli hav talent. hope 1 day u feel better and hav sumthin hapy 2 write about, bt 4 nw keep writin mre like this ther amazin xxx 5/5

omg such a good poem, you shud check out mine sumtime!!!!!!!! great poem

Good poem, I can really relate to it well done :)

This piece certainly brings the reader into the poem, with good description.
The line which reads:

'Its the sweeling around'

Did you mean swelling?

Stay Inspired
Nici