That was really good

This poem is absolutely sweet and very good. gr8 job. i love it. keep it up. ttyl sometime i guess ltrz

ITS AWSOME i really like the way you let your feelings soar

Aw...that was cute! i almost cried...lol...seriously. :)

OMG! this is ma fave i love this i swear its so cute
you write lovely love poems
i love them
especually this one lol its amzing so nice and long lol (that doesnt sound right but still lol)
xoxroxyxox

DUDE!!!!! people say i got good lyrics but man they havn't seen you write lol.. good work bro, and keep it up. Love shouldnt be tempted u r right... hope your following your own advice :D
5/5
good work!!!!!

Strong wording... Yet again Description is strong and vivid... x0x0

Very good
it is very well writen

Awww...that sooo sweet....such a great poem...so well written!! 5/5

comment on some of my junk! lol

Brittany

Thats AWESOME!!!! i really like it. i wish there were people at my school that would write poems then i woulden't be the only one lol

5/5

This was so amazing! I loved this. In some aspects I can relate. That's probably why I think highly of it. She must be so special to you. And you must really love her in order to write this.

Wow...I was nearly in tears reading this poem!! Its so emotional and touching!! This girl would be so lucky to have you!! If I ever had a guy write me a poem like that, I'd proably come close to fainting...lol maybe not but I would def cry!!! Your amazing!

This is really amazing poem...I loved it alot...

Okay, here's the deal: You need to add and remove words/syllables to make your lines flow rhythmically. I found myself noticing the oddity of your word choices instead of the poem. It has fine potential, you simply need to refine it.

But, I understand a poets work is what they want it to be. So, if this is how you imagined this work, then by all means don't change it. It's brilliant as it is.