Great poem, I relle dont kno what to say, just I hope your ok. This poem reminds me of myself, and if you need anyone to talk to I'm here and I know what it feels like.

Heather, Sad, my dear but a well written poem. I can feel your sadness, but it will get better. These trying times in our lives are so hard and believe me I've had many, but the key is to stay strong which is truly sometimes hard to do. I have faith in you, Heather, you will overcome this pain. I love you, hugs, *Ann*

It was nice and the idea may be a cliche but the way you put it all together wasn't.

Art is a great way to work through anger, to create a thing of beauty from such a dark emotion is a rare gift
5/5
Dave.....

just let the anger out! you'll feel better. things will brighten up, just give it some time. i'm always here for u if u need to talk.
great poem, had great amount of emotion.

~PLP~ lil slam~ Hugs & love~

I love this poem. Excellent work. >3jess

wow that was a great poem, i loved the pure raw emotion that came from it

omg this poem sucks, hehe, just kiddin'. You couldn't write a poem that sucks, even if you tried. It was great. I don't really like reading dark poems cuz they make me feel bad and stuff but that's not your fault. Anywho, this deserves a 5...hope you're okay.
Have a nice day.
Take Care.
Always, Danielle.

Great write! Although cutting is so overdone on this site, I enjoyed this piece! It was quite colorful...well done~Holly

awesome Heather, and hey, cliche can be good every now and then.
~Rae

Is there a gibberish translator in the house? I can't make head nor nail of that uber-babble you flung onto the screen during your latest spasmodic seizure. Rumor has it that you are almost incomprehensible in person (as revealed by your desperate urge to babble nonsensically on message boards.) No doubt, this rumor is true.

You read like a gimpzoid teenager splashing spit onto the monitor. Don’t you ever have a point beyond giving your fingers some exercise by dancing them randomly over the keyboard? Is that a conclusion or simply the place where you got tired of thinking? Reading your post makes blindness a wonderful thing to look forward to. As Robert Wilensky said: "We've all heard that a million monkeys banging on a million typewriters will eventually reproduce the entire works of Shakespeare. Now, thanks to the Internet, we know this is not true."

You have that certain nothing. Truly, you are about as interesting as watching a slug move slowly across a large rock. You are validating my inherent mistrust of strangers. Maybe you wouldn't read like such a pathetic loser if you weren't so stupid that even single-celled organisms out score you in IQ tests; if your weren't so fat that you make sumo wrestlers look anorexic, or if you didn't have a face that makes your pillow cry itself to sleep every night. Who am I kidding? You would.

Now, why don’t you climb onto that Special Needs tricycle of yours with the fourth wheel attached for extra-ensured retard stability and pedal your fat ass down to the sports field and do some “outdoors” stuff for a change. Hell, if you don’t like it, you can always offer to lick-clean the jockstraps.

1/5

I'll comment and vote on your poems, and reply to your email tonight.... sorry!

hey, i really liked this one, dont apoligize, its great

Great one...

Chris

Check out some of my new ones..

Excellent write, Heather. very well done...
5/5, take care, always believe in love, Amit

What makes emotion clishé is only disguised judgment... Don't label your work. I know people can realate, especially when the farmiliar feeling is put into such amazing words...some amazing metaphores in there..I love it. Cutting may be over done on this site, but this site also is what is keeping a lot of us from that fate ~ Exellent job, Heather.

"This world is full of takers. No one gives a shit about you. They just TAKE a shit on everything you do." Great poem Heather! You ride that "Special Needs" tricycle with the fourth wheel attatchment as far as you can. Hell some people aren't even trusted on a tricycle with four wheels (I'm not naming anyone in particular) Keep up the good work.
Aaron

Not bad at all Missy..yeah, slightly cliche way of discussing the topic...but you do it well i think.

one thing that struck me was the flow of the piece...i think you need to lose about 2 syllables per line, maybe not in the first line of each stanza..but for sure in the rest..you could achieve this by cutting out wasteful words...like "the" and "and" etc..

just some thoughts...

Aria,
It's called imagery. And I hate your call of stupidity in me, when in reality, you're being nothing but the follower of these 3 other men who have ganged up on a teenager girl. Now who's "ignorant/immature"
as for the other 3, I've done commented you. Too bad Omicron is actually a bit talented but for the other 2, well.........

And thank you Kevin and Aaron and everyone else.

Love
Heather M Craig

Wow, Powerful Stuff,
Scary Though, Well Done.

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