Awww i hope you're okay hun. I love you.

Heather

Had flow problems and your rhyme scheme was all over the place.

A few tips for you would be:

1) stick to one rhyme scheme per poem
2) count syllables on your hand if you can't do it in your head.
3) buy a thesaurus (that's not an insult, even I have one)
4) climax to your conclusion. not only was the ending line out of time, but it was no conclusion to be happy about. you could have dearly used a thesaurus throughout this whole poem.
5) try using these tips

Good poem once again, one I feel I can relate to. Keep it up

Angel this is very sad. I hope you are doing okay - I'm always here. <3
ALWAYS :D

^^Kal.