Excellent job Robert. This shows control yet, submissiveness to the reader. I like the irony it presents. Looking forward to more.

wonderful poem! real heart touching!

~PLP~ lil slam~

Powerful, i love the way it ended, amazing!

Sounds good... I was a little bit confused until the middle of the poem... but other than that it sounds good. n_n

Very nice. I like your writing style, a lot. :-) Thanks for the comment and vote, it meant a great deal to me. Take care and have a great Memorial Day weekend! ♥

Nice poem, very inspirational. It was great!
Thx for ur comments.

~*~~**m.c.flem**~~*~

wonderful note to son

This is such a sweet poem. Beautifully written. 5/5

~ Tina

How true! A loving and important letter to your son..beutifully written..Wishing you a wonderful day, Pia

great poem Robert

Heartfelt and sincere I liked this piece. It was different from some of your other writes, but in a good way!

Keep Writing
Nici

another great poem man your awsome any tips on how to improve mine?