"This tremendous love I have 4 you" For poems, I feel that you should definately not use chat words. Though it's easier to put a "4" instead of a "for," using chat words gives the reader the impression that you don't really care about your poems/that you're lazy.

"When you left you refused to take!" The last line seems to lean on the line before. It isn't a complete line just like that, and I had to read it twice to understand that you were still talking about the tremendous love you have for him. Try to make it make sense without having to lean onto the line before.

Other than that, keep up the good work and welcome to our club! You have a talent for writing, that is for sure.

Dorotea

Very Nice

Brought a tear to my eye but very good

This is one of my favorite poems i have yet to read to this day. i lost someone named steve too. my first kiss and boyfriend. it is so hard to lose someone. he is my inspritation to write poetry. i love the last line in this poem it is beautifully written. im sorry for your loss. if you get a chance please read some of mine too.

Great poem keep writing and take care hun sarah x

Boy, oh boy, am I speechless as ever...whoa!
Keep it up, keep it up!