The first part was good but then you jumped from message to the world to message to some one. that threw me off alot. The message was good but i think you had too many feelings when you wrote this and it was undefined the message you wanted to project more focus I guess but good words. Left me reading through the whole thing. Revision and more focus and this would be a 5...

I love how I'm the only one out of the three of us who actually wrote this poem to actually say it was written by more than one person so the feel shouldnt flow as well. Thanks for the credit Ken...

That was a great poem! 5.0 Could you return the favor by voting and commenting on sum of my poems! ♥

I really felt the frantic, multi thought aspect to this poem....it looked on the surface confused and irratic...but given the nature of the topic...that is exactly the feeling you were tryint o evoke right?...a person who is intelligent and aware of many angles to life, trying desperately to bring it all together into one coherant consciousness stream.

It works...hard to read..but i get it.

Thts nice, i admit it is confusing but its a good write, keep it up. Great job. Plz comment and vote on some of mine

While I tend to like more rhythmtic poems, I really did enjoy it. It had apparent meanings that you expressed well, and I loved its progression throughout. 'Lost in our forests', I love that interpretation. It makes the reader reveal things of their owns and take out the personification and really think about it. Well Done!