Cute one...keep writing!

A.B..........................anyone who is not "mesmerized" by your work is missing out. Be he, the fool, who will not look at you someday, in that same way. Excellent writing. Still #1 to me.

Amanda,

I loved it. I could relate entirely. Except I am the one starring at someone I can't have. But anyways, loved it as usual. I loved the flow, the words, just everything. I hope you find what you're looking for.

Take Care,

Jesse

Amanda,
You are so gifted. The flow, the words, every line written so well. Loved it my friend.
hugs, love,
*Ann*

That's so sweet I wish I could find that too! You are a very talented writer! Keep it up! Take Care~! Brooke

Thats by far one of the sweetest poems I've ever read.

Beautifully written from beginning to end!

It's sweet and every other girl dreams of the same thing!

Beautifully penned, I love this piece! The flow is flawless and your rhymes are natural! These lines are absolutely breathtaking:

"He gazes at her in utter wonder
Totally entangled in his fascination"

The only tip I have is you may want to change this line below:

"It’s in the passion in his kiss"

It might sound better if you say:
It's in the passion of his kiss, just a thought! Keep it up~Holly

OH MY GODD ! GIRL U TOTALLY ROCK !!!!!!!!!!!! this poem was sooo amazing and i really loved it :D:D u have great talent ! WAYY TO GO :D
doodeee

I love this poem
the imagery(sp?)
it's wonderful