Comments : Dumb but alive

  • 18 years ago

    by Hayley Marie

    great write. 5/5
    Hayley-Ree xxxx

  • 18 years ago

    by No Motiv?

    My favorite part was "In this square shaped world only we can go far"....that's simply ingenious. The rest of them poem....I liked the rhyming scheme and the message portrayed. Great job.

  • 18 years ago

    by EoB

    Agree with No Motiv..that was my fav part.

    The rhyming scheme was good, and it had a nice flow=)

    Keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by EoB

    Agree with No Motiv..that was my fav part.

    The rhyming scheme was good, and it had a nice flow=)

    Keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by Arora

    It all sounds good... maybe you can work on the last verse a bit though n_n

  • 18 years ago

    by Corrie

    very nice! i liked it! 5/5 *KISSES*~Corrie