Comments : One Last Breath

  • 18 years ago

    by Tammy

    Absolutely beautiful poem...well worth the wait :o)
    Seriously, that was great!! Wonderful message.
    Take care and God bless.

  • 18 years ago

    by bluexeyesxkill

    thats rele great. i think its awesome how you included the scripture and still got a great rhytm

  • 18 years ago

    by Rylee

    that was way good it made me cry please comment on mine many thanks Rylee

  • 18 years ago

    by LAST RONIN

    good writing.. very diffrent from most poems on the site

  • 18 years ago

    by Katrina Boblina

    wow, absolutely beautiful, i loved this...great job once again!

  • 18 years ago

    by XxXangeltearsXxX

    thank you everyone........i really appreciate your comments!

  • 18 years ago

    by ChevyCowgirl23

    thats an awesome message!!! thanks for commenting on my site! god bless
    Amanda

  • 18 years ago

    by Emily

    Great adjectives, and it really sucks in the reader! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Just Lucy

    Some thorns were placed upon him
    Woven to form a crown
    From the cuts his Sacred Blood
    Slowly trickled down

    that was my fav part, great writing i really love it how you can write about anything!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Andrea

    omgosh...i loved this poem! awesome job on it...5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Britney

    Awesome poem... its great how you can provide such a powerful message and still make it rhyme. Loved it! 5/5!

  • 18 years ago

    by Lydia O

    You took a meaningful subject and wove it into an excellent poem. It is well written, has good flow and rhyme pattern. Great job!

  • 16 years ago

    by catalina

    Wow...breathtaking...im inspired..great job girl!! :)