Very nice, but if you want to have a rhyming sequence you should try to stay with the same one, keep it consistent, loved the wording you used tthough, very nice.
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Different.. But i liked it.. its one of those poems you just cannot stop reading until your @ the end hehe.. Anyways awesome write! keep it up.

i really liked this poem its very unique

Nice job on this one as well.

Nice job on this one as well.