good poem, i think it need to flow a little better.. and this verse is kind of out of place

this all happened because
i was too afraid to say
what i needed to say and now I'm

needs a little work, but its good. keep writing

I like the way this doesn't have a continuous rhythm. It fits in with the emotion of the poem. Good work.xxx

Wow.. alot of emotion in that one! But i reallie liked it alot esp. the begning it had a very nice flow to it and a good message. great job.