that was a great poem. it reminds me of my friend and i. keep up the good work!

The last stanza does sit quite right, but I think that's in the wording, not the focus.

Replacing But with Although or something similar will give it more strength. But then this isn't my vision it's yours.

Nicely concise and to the point!

B

Aww dis was a gwd poem n sad.. n soz though
keep writing kk tc mwa luv ya xoxox