wow that was awesome. i liked it alot. and i know exactly how you feel. i liked this poem. great job..i have lost a guy before and it felt like i was only being used. so if you ever want to chat i love to talk to new people. great job

I feel the same ;\
except the person was forced away he had to move alll the way across the world..
Rachel..
thanks for you comment.

Keep up the good work. Will read some more of your poems soon. You have major talent.

Steve

One thing I notice people on here are not really helping one another with critism. I notice in this poetry, as I do it myself. Grammar could be a little stronger, your later work shows you improved with it, but this shows a little mistakes. Do you proof read? Or somebodyelse? I use so much emotion sometimes I tend to write like this, To walk the dog over, then he decided to.
As you will notice walked over what, he decide to what? to to walk over the bridge, then he decided to chase rabbit. Which is stronger and people get the fuller picture of what us poets trying to right. Have I been helpful or a pain in the ***. Us poets need to stay together.

So much miss.

What an excellent write Brittany... very heartfelt and emotional.... and so positive in the end......

So sad and emotional. As Anglea has pointed out, the ending is very positive and hopeful. Wonderful write!