Wonderful job with the inverted word order, making the lines rhyme, flowing excellently. Love it.

xxx

Good poem with deeper meaning it was a pleasure to read!

take care

loved this poem
u're an amazing writter, realy u've got many tallent
i would like to get some advice from u if u've got a little time

take care, chao!

. . . p i l i ♥

I really liked this poem.. i cant pinpoint it, but for some reason it reminds me of a movie or war or somthing. but either way it is still meaningful and sends across a strong message.... i know however, that the one i love, i will never forget nomatter how long we are apart, they will always remain in my heart, and all the memories we shared never forgotten... my favorite part was

Though your tears run now I know,
That as the weeks go past,
And a time passes so vast,
You will never remember me,
So don't cry, and let me be.

it really hit my heart. thankyou for voting on my poems

Hey daniel,
i've never heard of u b4 but when i saw ur comment i decided to check u out. luv ur poems! by the way, my poem u commented on is finished n improved, so hope u'll read it n like it now, i fixed that mistake. This poem i just read is amazingly wonderful...it almost made me cry...alot of my friends have moved away or gone to war...and i always find tears for them, but i would never forget them, friends run footprints through your heart....
keep up the good work, thx for comments on my poemsXXXXXX
XXweepingwolfXX