excellent poem. a couple spelling mistakes but other than that flawless. keep up the good work
~*Freak*~

yeah my spelling sucks...Im working on it...

I really like the emotion in the poem. Very well done.

Thanks for the compliments on my poems also.

Keep up the excelent work!

so i changed some things what do you think?

Ok, overall it is a good job. I like the metaphor you have used, and the way you described the changing of the rose. However, it would be better if you started everyline either with or without a capital letter, not a mixture. Also, a few spelling mistakes.

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first line is should be his. The poem is good as it is but to me its missing somthing. I can't put my finger on it though.

well i liked it. all was good except for one spelling mistake: ininnocences. when you put it out like that it sounds like you're stuttering. Peaces, //ari\\

Your poem is actually very stimulating, and thought-provoking. Poetry cannot be put in box. It is a mental picture, you can have 365 readers everday of year, and all of them will give you 365 different interpretations.

I am very glad I read your poem, good job.