Hey,not bad,not bad.But where is the feeling?where's the action? why are you writing this? your tlling of someone killing someone.any one with a brain could do that. but why is he killing you? think about these questions.
16 years ago
Very nicely written as always.. Defiantly one of my favorites.. Creative and full of emotion.. Keep writing and take care (always))xx:
That was amazing Andrea! This poem was so awesome. I loved how you wrote it. It was so descriptive and I could picture in my mind everything that was going on throughout the poem. Just amazing job! I wuv you! <33
you did a beautiful job showing what both people were thinking and how well you fit them together! i give you credit! but you are one of my favorite poets on here and as i read your pieces of work i can definately see why you are on that list! can't wait to see more from you!!