Mhm.. Dark and mysterious...! It has a beat to it, and I like it. Good.

wow, awesome i wanna read more of it too! great poem keep writing!

this is a great example of how poems can be great without rhyming well done!!

Very unique! I am a fan of dark poems! Well done I look forward to reading part 2! Take Care! Brooke~

Looks like we may have another promising young writer in our midst. I feel the poems emotions which is good. Has a sort of suspence in its ending which is different. X

I liked the way you wrote this.
great job. 5/5
take care,
marjan

really good poem hunny, keep it up

emma x

very good, can't wait to read part two,

this is a good poem and i cant wait to read part 2!
great job

wow...this poem is beyong any word i can think of... keep up the amazing work!!
Ariane
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This is so great

Ilove it