Wow you have really sucky comments....i'll try to change that...well i absolutly loved this poem...it was so original...the flow was very different but all the better ....5/5

This is great! Very original. I liked the way you show finding a path! Great... Loved it!

Nice poem, not my usual style. Keep it up

I like your use of ellipses, it really had drive....but not my kind of poem again...still it was very well written...

[lostlaureate - come find me]

Great ending - the repetition throught the poem really gives power to the last line, in past tense instead of present.

Peace. [Sole]

Very nice. i realy like this line: A small beam of light within the darkness,
Shining through the spiders web