This is really good, but kinda sad keep up the good work.

For your age, this is a really good poem. I'm giving you a 5, plus some tips.

You're structure started off with 5 lines in a verse, then switched to 4 and ended with 1 (if you are switching make sure there's a pattern). Keep that constant. The first 3 verses ended with the word 'reverse' then the last one didn't (a bit inconsistant). The poem is good, if u took out the 4th line in the first verse. That will fix things ;)

thnx for the read :)
<3 Darien

Thats a really good poem! So much emotion and intersting style. Amazing. Keep up the awesome work! 5/5
~Luvz~
~Chica~

O0o it was a good one...It started off in a rhyme and didn't finsh that way...interesting concept...
amandaxOx

3/5

The rhythm was too rough.
and I became confused.
~Emah