A violent drunk, are we...? I liked the poem. For some reason your style reminds me of A Perfect Circle and Green Day's music. You could definately turn this into a song. I like how you were able to convey such intense emotion in this piece. I could feel your sadness... And I'm sorry all this happened to you. So many great firsts coming to blur from the bottle... Such it is for many, unfortunately. *hug* I gave you a 5/5 on this you did well.

interesting...this is original...well done...

"My head wants some more to drink
But my body has had enough."

That's what happens to a lot of people...and they don't stop, sadly...

"Blush" is fine with me...thank you very much for the compliments...I really appreciate the comments :)

xxx

OK.. honestly, wat reli caught my eye bout this is that November is my b-month. hehe.. and yea, for me, its sorta special, too (only coz of my bday..:P) u noe, this felt more like a convo that rhymed than it was a poem.. but i loved the way it made me feel u wer talking to ur readers.. reli interesting.. am sorry bout ur "November".. i hope u dun hate it now or anythin.. besides, jus w8.. lyk, 3 months and ul hv it agen :D
gud work.. enjoyed it.
keep it up
nouna

So original man!
I loved how you wrote it as if you were talking to the reader!
Like in this part..
"That part didn't rhyme…
Why the hell do I care?
No one ever listens
All they do is stare"

And many more like that, The flow was good even tho at parts it didn't rhyme.
It was a sad poem, but at times I laughed like when you were explaining your self :D

This poem is written great and I really enjoyed it, wow, I swear its the first one like that ive ever read, and I really liked it. You can tell what type of person you from readong it :D
Well id say funny but upset..

Great work keep it up and as Katieness said "keep your head up, and keep on writing" because your great at it :D

x)

I have never read a poem liek this and thats what makes me love it so much. keep up the good work 5.5

Okay i wasn't confused until you gave that nice little ending statement lol the poem sounds like you are regretful and like it was a bad alcoholic blur then you made it sound as though it was the best month ever.....
breaking the rhyme scheme played out well i thought it was really cute
good poem good ideas mixed ideas

I am sorry mate, I did not intend to call you a "girl". You must truly forgive me for I am a bit tired. YOur work is awesome, thanks indeed for sharing it with us. Keep it up!

That is really emotional. I have been there..just not drunk. I know how much it hurts. When you feel like noone can hear you. Yeah well, great poem. You have a magnificent gift. Keep up the awesome work :) Xx Chrissie