Comments : Always and Forever

  • 18 years ago

    by undying blusher

    Beautiful...lovely flow and just plain sweet!

    "always and forever, I'll forever love you"

    ^ I would suggest one thing...to change that last line to something as, "always and forever, I shall love you." Since you just said forever...to repeat it so soon seems unnecessary...nice work, keep writing!

    xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by SweetSuicide

    Wow awesome poem..you got talent..so keep wrting and posting..love you work..5/5