Comments : Trapped (Haiku)

  • 18 years ago

    by Feline Fatigue

    You're really good at this, I like these a lot

  • 18 years ago

    by Drew Gold

    Im not really good with haiku's, but your imagery is so in tune with nature, i love it.. i gather from this that it's from the eyes of an insect being spun in a spiders web.. these are really weird to critique,.. the syllable count seems to be a bit off. if i remember correctly, it should be.. 5-7-5 respectively.. though, ive read a lot of poems from a man who lived in japan for an amount of time, and his haiku's didnt always follow this pattern, so i guess you're fine with this..